The increasing availability of low-cost airlines now lets people travel around the world. Some feel this is a positive development while others think it is negative overall. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
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the tourism industry is recovering Change preposition
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air fares in recent times. Add a hyphen
low-cost
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to reduce prices to compete with it. Use synonyms
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which has impacted positively to the economy.
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negative feedback from passengers. Replace the quantifier
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have opted out of basic amenities on the flight Use synonyms
such
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Check your grammar and punctuation. For example, 'The post-COVID pandemic impact to the tourism industry is recovering due to the low cost air fares in recent times.' should be 'The post-COVID pandemic impact on the tourism industry is recovering due to the recent availability of low-cost airfares.' Avoid unnecessary commas and make sure your sentence structures are correct.
Coherence and Cohesion
Be precise and clear in your argument. For instance, instead of saying 'This concept has enabled tourists to not only select different routes, but also it has started a competition among major airlines to reduce prices to compete with it.', it would be clearer to say 'Not only has this change allowed tourists to select different routes, but it has also ignited competition among major airlines, leading to reduced prices.'
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Punctuation
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