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Is learning to speak a foreign language as important these days as it was in the past? Write an essay giving your opinion.

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In the past, learning a
second
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language
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 was important in the individual's everyday life.
However
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, I think that nowadays it is more crucial to know a foreign
language
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 than it was in the
last
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 years. On the one hand, a
while
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 back , knowing a
second
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language
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 was really helpful.
This
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 skill helped people to speak with individuals from other countries , to make international deals, and
also
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 to sell goods.
For example
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, a German man who knew Romanian could make a deal with the Romanian society only because he knew the
language
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.
Moreover
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, back
then
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, individuals who knew more than one
language
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 were considered intelligent and from a high social class.
On the other hand
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, these days it is more important to know a foreign
language
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 . Nowadays , people can not travel or buy things from the internet without knowing a
second
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language
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. By only knowing their native tongue , it is really hard to visit other countries because there are small chances that those from there will understand your
language
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.
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, for a girl who speaks only Romanian, it will be very hard to travel and get
along with
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 the community from Ukraine, because she will not be able to obtain what she wants.
Furthermore
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, when the population buy things from the internet, the description of the product is usually in English so, without knowing
this
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second
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language
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 it will be hard for them to purchase the right product. In conclusion, I believe that even though a
while
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 back it was useful for people to know another
language
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besides
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 their native one, these days it is more crucial, not only because society travels more ,but
also
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 because the description of products is written in a foreign tongue.

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content
The essay could be improved by providing more precise examples reflecting the current importance of knowing a foreign language.
style
There are some issues related to the word choice and awkward sentences. Consider refining it for a more seamless reading experience.
coherence and cohesion
The flow of the essay could be improved with more sophisticated linking words and phrases.
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