You have recently made a purchase from the local department store. However, when you arrived home, you found a fault awith it. Write a letter to the mana what product is, explain the problem and say what you’d like to beger, say done about it.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing regarding a gadget I purchased yesterday on
22nd
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of November from Star Departmental Store, located in Sheridan College Plaza Brampton which I found
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when I tried it at home. It is a Samsung
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3's
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charger, white in
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and it
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me
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for
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250 dollars. Even though,
according to
the description,
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speed is 10 times faster than any other charger of other companies.
Moreover
, It was working
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uninterruptedly
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at the Departmental store but when I used it for more than 5 minutes it frequently disconnected. At one point, I thought,
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might be in my phone.
Therefore
, I tried another Android cell phone and found
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similar result. Since
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it is not
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worthy
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, I would request you to either replace it or fix it as soon as possible because I am the only one who uses
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a samsung
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samsung
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mobile in my residence. I hope you will consider my request and come up with
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positive feedback. Yours faithfully, Harpreet Kaur.
Submitted by harpreet291kaur on

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task achievement
Although the task response is generally well-addressed, ensure that you clearly state how the problem has impacted your use of the product and any inconveniences it has caused you.
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Consider varying your vocabulary slightly to avoid repetitive phrases such as 'when I used it' and enhancing clarity and interest.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to include a clearer summary of your expectations towards the end to strengthen your task response even further.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured, with a clear introduction, description of the problem, and a request, making it easy for the reader to follow.
task achievement
The tone is polite and appropriate for a formal letter, strengthening the overall effectiveness of the communication.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are correctly formatted, enhancing the formality of the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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