The pictures show information about average income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in a city in the UK.

The provided pie charts illustrate the rates of
income
and expenditure on
meal
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meals
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and
clothes
by an average family in one UK town between
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the year
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year
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years
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2010 and 2013. The units were measured by percentages.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
although
income
decreased the spending on food and
clothes
increased,
the
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figure of
income
was higher than
expenses
in the majority family.
Moreover
, the majority of the family's
expenses
were concentrated in two categories: "
fruit
&
vegetables
" and "
meat
&
fish
,"
while
other categories made up a smaller portion of the
expenses
throughout the given period. In 2010, from
overall
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family
income
at
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of
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29000 only 14000 used in expenditure on
meal
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meals
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and
clothes
.
In addition
, the two
majority
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of
expenses
were
fruit
and
vegetables
and
meat
and
fish
at 29% and 26% respectively.
Furthermore
, the rest of
expenditures
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(dairy products, other food, and
clothes
)
which
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accounted for under 20%. In 2013, even though
income
experienced
fall
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approximately
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of approximately
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4000 to 25000, the number of
family’s
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families
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spending on
meal
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meals
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and
clothes
rose to 15000.
Similarly
, there were two highest family expenditures (
fruit
&
vegetables
and
meat
&
fish
),
however
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spending on
meat
and
fish
exceeded
fruit
and
vegetables
comprised
for
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at 30 % and 23 % respectively. Meanwhile,
others
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types of family
require
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were only around below 20%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average income
  • spending habits
  • proportion
  • cost of living
  • economic changes
  • cultural factors
  • standard of living
  • economic health
  • leftover income
  • savings
  • expenses
  • financial trends
  • value for money
  • economic forecasts
  • significant increase/decrease
  • spending patterns
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