The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of girls per 100 boys enrolled in different levels of school education.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart depicts the quantity of girls and 100
biys
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boys
enrolled in various levels of school
education
.
Overall
, it is
noticebale
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noticeable
that the developed
countries
had the largest number of children,
while
developing
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the developing
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countries
lowest.
Furthermore
, secondary and tertiary
education
showed upward trends except primary which showed negligible difference.
To begin
with primary
education
, developing
countries
accounted for 83 in 1990 which increased to 87 in 1998.
Therefore
, in developed
countries
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there
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were
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was
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negligible difference, namely 95 and 96. In terms of secondary
education
, developed
countries
shared similar numbers in both years, namely 98 and 99 roughly but they did not reach a target. The figure for developing
countries
had
Verb problem
was
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roughly 72 in 1990,
while
in 1998 was 82. With regards to tertiary
education
, developing
countries
accounted for 66 in 1990 which rose sharply to 75 in 1998.
Consequently
, developed
countries
in both years reach a target and were the highest type of
education
which had the biggest number of children over the period in
qustion
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question
.
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