The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the changes in the amount of closed
shops
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and opened
shops
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in a country from 2011 to 2018. It is obvious to witness that there were most
shops
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opened in 2011 and
also
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the
number
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of closed stores was the most in the same year. What's more, the shop closed in 2015 were nearly negligible amounts. Looking into the data in more detail, the
number
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of opening
shops
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in 2011 accounted for over 8000,
then
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dramatically dropped to under 4000 in the next year.
Then
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the
number
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steadily remained between 4000 and 6000 but decreased to 3000 in the
last
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year.
On the other hand
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, the figure for closed
shops
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showed an
overall
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decrease in the duration, there were more than 6000
shops
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closed in 2011 and increased slightly in the next 3 years, but fluctuated in 2015 with the
number
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of 500.
then
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the data was constant with around 5000.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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