IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

Some people prefer to work in large companies or organizaons. Others prefer to start their own companies and work for themselves. Which appeals to you more-working for a big company or managing your own business? Use speci!c reasons and examples to explain your answer

#people #work #companies #organizaons #appeals #company #business #speci #c
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Nowadays people for a variety of reasons, prefer to work in large companies or organizations,
instead
Linking Words
 of starting their own companies and working for themselves. As I am one of those, I will write down, why
this
Linking Words
 is happening.
Firstly
Linking Words
, the majority of people in our century, don't have the budget to open their own companies. For that, you need a huge capital for start-up, and for the
company
Use synonyms
 way on. So people prefer to spend their savings to get well educated, so to get a good position in a large
company
Use synonyms
 or organization. Opening,
for example
Linking Words
, a computer
company
Use synonyms
, needs big capital.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, having an excellent education and studies in that field can provide you with a lot of income.
Secondly
Linking Words
, If you are the kind of person that you don't like to be under the rules of others,
then
Linking Words
 it is better for you to have a job by yourself. You won't have specific hours, or somebody to look after your work. As an example, being a chef is something you can do. Having your educational skills, opening a restaurant or a catering
company
Use synonyms
 and making your own profit slowly.
Lastly
Linking Words
, I want to mention that, both have advantages and disadvantages. Is up to everyone's beliefs, which may want to keep. Both have difficulties, but nothing is prohibited. If you have the knowledge, and patience you can reach big goals on both issues.
Overall
Linking Words
, in spite of my good position in an organisation, I would like some time in the future trying start a
company
Use synonyms
 of my own. I want to have a bookshop, where to spend my
last
Linking Words
 years and stop working for others. May it seems difficult but the only way to find out, is to try it.
Submitted by mayiou on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: