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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what extent do you agree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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As a fact, some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. Adverts are all around us. In TV, the Web, phones, magazines and bus stations. Are everywhere. Providing from everyday products to ethical opinions. In my logic though,
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 is a big mistake. And I am going to explain the reasons in my essay.
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, with all these
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 all around us, we have become addicted to shopping and to gossip about everything.
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 is a problem for our health. Even if we need it or no we buy everything because the young beautiful late for the advert does the same. For advertising a sop, they present you with a necked woman having a shower. Why isn't it prohibited that? With
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 image we pass to the youngest that everything is allowed, so don't be ashamed of your body. Is natural to go out without clothes. Ethical issues must pass over the
advertisements
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, because of the frequent views.
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, looking at a political campaign from
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, people make wrong decisions. I prefer that politician because is handsome, has money and surely, he will be better. No,
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 is a big mistake.
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 for
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 reasons must be prohibited too. Those are some examples for many on their subject. Yes, I strongly believe that advertising our days is unethical and unacceptable and gives wrong messages to our youngest. So, all of you there, consider that and try the next time you are going to draw an advertisement to be more concise for the good of our society.
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