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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically beneficial. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#foods #people #food
Nowadays the
market
of
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food
 in every single country means
huge
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a huge
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 combination of local
food
 which is mostly presented on the
market
 and section of goods and
food
 that
bought
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 and
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delivered
delivired
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delivered
 from other
countries
, The free economic
market
 and technologies gives
option
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 to compensate
the
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 lack of specific
food
 or components by simply ordering that from other
countries
, Eating local
food
 has many advantages for
customer
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itself
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and for
country
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the country
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 in general, since
food
 that
made
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is made
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 locally
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doesn't
doesnt
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 require so much action related
with
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 ordering and shipping
that
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to
destination
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makes
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 the price for
the
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local
food
 mostly cheaper than items bought and imported from other
countries
,
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 local
food
 gives advantages not only for customers
,
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 but
also
 for economic
aspect
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 in general for
country
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the country
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, In
this
 way, customers are able to get cheaper local items and that helps your local manufacturer by purchasing their
food
, On the other side,
while
 I'm working on
this
 topic we can see that
food
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market
 is
complex
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 structure and has
it's
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 own rules, As an example we can take a look
on
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problem
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 of wheat from Ukraine, There are plenty of
countries
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mostly
moslty
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most
 located in
Far
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the Far
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 East and Africa that have difficult economical or climate situation and require our wheat as an alternative of their local
food
, But there are
also
 few European
countries
 that are interested in blocking delivery
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
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