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the bar chart below shows the top ten countrie for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014

the bar chart below shows the top ten countrie for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014
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The bar graph gives how the
data
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 on
electricity
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 generation and
consumption
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 changed among ten different countries in 2014.
Overall
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 it can be seen that
China
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 produced and consumed the highest amount of
electricity
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whereas
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 the
Korea
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Korean
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 Republic showed the lowest production and
consumption
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 of
power
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.
Furthermore
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,
electricity
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 generation was lower than usage in Germany. Looking at the
electricity
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 production
data
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 set in detail
it is clear that
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China
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 generated the
power
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 in accounting 5398
billion
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KWh
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 in 2014.
On the other hand
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,
remained
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the remaining
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 nine countries
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such
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as the USA, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and Korea produced 4099, 936.2, 871, 618.9, 561.2, 530.7, 526.6 and 485.1
billion
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KWh
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 respectively which all
data
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 showed lesser than the
data
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 on
China
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. Turning to the
power
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consumption
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data
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 sets it is evident that the Korean Republic gave the lowest
data
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 on
electricity
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 usage in 2014 accounting for 449.5
billion
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KWh
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.
While
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China
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 consumed 5322
billion
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KWh
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 which was the maximum
consumption
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 among the ten countries. 3866, 856.7, 698.8, 499.9, 462.9, 455.8 and 582.5
billion
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 KHh
electricity
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 were consumed by the USA, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, and Germany respectively.
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, the generation and usage amount of
power
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 was very close in Russia accounting for 1057 and 1038
billion
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KWh
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words data, electricity, consumption, china, power, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "set" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • gigawatt hours (GWh)
  • renewable energy sources
  • non-renewable energy sources
  • industrialization
  • economic activities
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainability
  • energy efficiency
  • power generation
  • grid capacity
  • energy policies
  • consumption patterns
  • energy demand
  • production-consumption disparity
  • environmental impact
  • greenhouse gas emissions
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