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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatment instead of visiting their usual doctors. Do you agree or disagree with this idea .

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Today, a huge number of humans who have disease problems rely on different
remedies
, so they are not eager to visit
doctors
. Some people believe that there are appropriate ways to solve illnesses.
On the other hand
 , individuals think that
doctors
 have enough knowledge and experience for
remedies
 . I am in
favor
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 of
doctors
' advice. The first group maintains that chemical drugs have side
effect
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effects
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 on bodies and we must keep
out
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our
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 bodies from chemical drugs. They not only believe that these types of drugs are not able to solve disease problems
,
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but
also
 that they cause extra problems
as a result
,
doctors
 and their
orders
 are unusable.
On the other hand
,
Majority
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 of people advocate
this
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the
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 idea that
doctors
' advice
are
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 based on scientific research and investigations. If patients refuse to take
orders
, they will not be able to get better,
however
, it would be better that take
doctors
’
orders
 seriously. In my opinion, traditional
remedies
 have not been
proved
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proven
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 by the scantiest. Despite it has some experiences or historical evidence, it doesn’t have a scientific base.
As a result
 of
this
 fact, doctor
orders
 are acceptable. In conclusion, In spite of
the
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this
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 fact, some people strongly believe in different ways
for
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of
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remedies
 .
Other
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Others
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 agree with
new
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the new
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 technology that
doctors
 rely on. I claim that we are not able
to
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,to
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 tell the truth
on
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about
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 former or unknown
remedies
 ,
due to
this
 is why I think
doctors
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doctors'
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 advice must be taken seriously.
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