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Some people think the best way to be successful in life is to get a university education. Others disagree and say this is no longer true. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #life #university #education
In
this
 contemporary epoch,whilst proponents contend that
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tertiary education is vital for becoming successful in their lives others oppose that
idea
.From my perspective ,I support the latter
idea
 and I will discuss it in more detail.
To begin
 with,supporters of
first
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idea
 argued that
university
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 education is
mainstay
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a mainstay
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 for living in
this
 dynamic and modern world.
Furthermore
,
as
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 having any
perquisties
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prerequisites
perquisites
 increase your chances of enrollment in any establishment.
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Moreover
,
by
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spending
of
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your
life time
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lifetime
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 in
faculty
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a faculty
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provide
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 you better environment to learn
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 of communication.
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,it is most common that
eductational
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educational
 folks
plays
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vital
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 in
overall
 country economics by getting
professional
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the professional
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 position of employment.
On the other hand
,
opponite
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opposite
opponents
 of
former
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idea
 contend that there is no necessity to obtain any higher qualification.
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, there are many examples in existing worlds which are sound examples of that without
terminal
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 degree we can
also
get
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achievements in
life's
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such
 as Cristiano Ronaldo.
Morever
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Moreover
,society who are ambitious with other skills
likewise
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 graphic designing,
web
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and web
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 designing by living a higher Standard of
life
they
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also
 prove that
for being
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 a successful person education is not too necessary.
To sum up
,
after
this
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 points, it can reiterated that for getting achievements in your
life
 credentials is not too necessary we can
also
 acquire success by mastering any skill.
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  • specialized knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • networking opportunities
  • vocational training
  • self-made entrepreneurs
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  • online courses
  • certifications
  • formal education
  • practical experience
  • lifelong learning
  • career goals
  • individual circumstances
  • academic qualifications
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