The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected cities for last year. The pie chart shows distribution of Aaustralian water consumption for last year
The bar above graph shows the
water
usage from 6 cities in Australia from the last
year. The units are in kiloliters
per house. The below pie chart illustrates the proportions where the water
is used by 7 industries.
Overall
, we can see that the main type of consumption was agriculture and all cities used more than 100 kiloliters
on average.
Firstly
, the highest used was in Perth which used up about 300 kiloliters
per place
. The second with the most consumption was Brisbane which consumed 250 kL per place
and this
number was nearly the same as Adelaide. Although
the consumption in Melbourne was low with only 150 kiloliters
per place
the least usage was not them. Canberra owned the least usage place
they used less than 150 kiloliters
per place
.
Focusing on the proportion. agriculture had the most percentage which was 67%. The second type with the highest percentage was households which used 9%. Moreover
, there were the same numbers on water
supply and electricity and gas by 7%. There were small numbers for Manufacturing and other industries with 4%. Lastly
, the lowest type that consumed water
was Mining with about 2%.Submitted by shayakornsupasatit on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, kiloliters, place with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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