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Some pople think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work intead of bering put behind bars. To what extend do you agree?

#pople #prisoners #community #work #intead #bars
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to ask you about the possibility
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 the course. I am highly interested in computers and want to gain skills to use
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 properly. I think, nowadays
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 required for any job.
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 it is mentioned that it is necessary to complete an elementary course. It is hard for me to find a suitable one because all those that I saw take too long. It is unnecessary for me to spend
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, I would like to ask you to make an exception and allow me to enrol in the course. I
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 not create any
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 some preparations at home. If it is possible, please, contact me. If you require any additional information, let me know. Yours faithfully, Basil Turkin
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