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Some people believe that climate has the greatest effect on people's way of life. Other believe that the economy of the region has the greatest effect. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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It is said that
climate
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 has a huge
impact
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 on our
lives
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while
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 others think that
this
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 effect is caused by the
economy
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. I believe that the
economy
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 is the most contributing factor as the
climate
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 can be controlled by the business. On the one hand, some see that
climate
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 is the most contributing factor to our
lives
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 because the availability of natural resources depends on food, water and energy.
For example
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,
people
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 who live near the desert have trouble with water shortages.
Moreover
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,
people
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's lifestyles are
also
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 impacted
due to
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 the
weather
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 they live in.
For instance
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, clothing, houses and food.
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, the profession in the cold
weather
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 is different from the hot
climate
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. It can be seen that
people
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 living in tropical
weather
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 export more rice than in cold
weather
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 nations.
Therefore
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,
climate
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change
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 has an
impact
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 on individuals.
On the other hand
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, the
economy
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 plays a vital role in our daily
lives
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. When the
economy
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 has improved
people
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's buying decisions
change
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. Take buying a mobile phone as an example,
people
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 in good
economy
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 countries use iPhones as their daily necessary items
whereas
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people
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 in poor
economy
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 countries do not have mobile or buy cheap Chinese mobile phones.
Similarly
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,
people
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 in rich nations become more educated compared to poor nations. I believe that the
economy
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 is more important than the
climate
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. It is because
people
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 can
change
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 the
climate
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 when a country has a better income.
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, China converted the desert into fertile land with huge government funding because they have a good
economy
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.
As a result
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 of
this
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,
people
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 living in these places are improved.
Therefore
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, the
economy
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 has more
impact
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 on us.
To sum up
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, both
economy
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 and
climate
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 have an
impact
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 on our daily
lives
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,
however
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; I am now clear that having a good
economy
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 can almost
change
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 everything including
climate
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 which leads to improving our lifestyles.
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