Economic progress is not the only way to measure the success of a country. What other factors do you think there are in measuring the success of a country? Which do you think is the most important factor?
Some people think that financial prosperity is not the only factor which shows
achievements
of the Correct article usage
the achievements
country
. I agree that money
is not the only way for
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to
success
determination, and I try to show some more factors which can be used in valuation
of Add an article
the valuation
success
of Correct article usage
the success
country
and try to highlight Add an article
the country
a country
most
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the most
important
.
On the one hand, Correct pronoun usage
onesimportant
money
is the universal way to measure success
of countries, especially in terms of capitalistic paradigm society development. It seems clear that one Add an article
the success
country
which makes more many
than another one, Correct your spelling
money
in particular
GDP per capita, is more effective. It comes from determination
of Add an article
the determination
effectiveness
which is relation
of spent energy to achieved result. On top of that ability to fast adaptivity can be observed Add an article
the relation
a relation
likewise
the success
element and must be measured by money
. For example
, countries which can predict future trends and develop proper technologies can earn more money
. Such
happened with Tesla company in USA
which cough the idea to create electricity cars. Correct article usage
the USA
Due to
this
, assets
of Correct article usage
the assets
this
company now are most
expensive in the world.
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the most
On the other hand
, happiness
of citizens must be taken Add an article
the happiness
like
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as
effectiveness
of Add an article
the effectiveness
country
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the country
being
. Obviously, there is no point Unnecessary verb
apply
to speak
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in speaking
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the country
country
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country's
effectiveness
if inhabitants are unhappy. Happiness
depends from
the Change preposition
on
government
will and Change noun form
government's
closely
related Add a missing verb
is closely
with
different paradigms Change preposition
to
such
as capitalism, socialism, communism or even digital fascism which can appeared
in the Change the verb form
appear
nearest
future. Correct word choice
near
Although
digital or pharmaceutical fascism can be more effective in terms of money
it has nothing with happiness
of people. Add an article
the happiness
However
, happiness
is not Correct article usage
a materialistic
materialistic
category it Correct article usage
a materialistic
also
can be scaled and measured. For example
, comparable research of
the level of Change preposition
on
happiness
in socialistic China and capitalistic Japan shows that Chinese people much
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are much
more happy
than Replace the words
happier
Japanese
and Correct article usage
the Japanese
number
of suicides among Correct article usage
the number
of
Japanese Change preposition
apply
are
much higher.
In Correct subject-verb agreement
is
conclusion
I would like to highlight that Add a comma
,conclusion
money
is not the only and not the major way of measuring of country
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country's
effectiveness
. My prediction is that other factors such
as happiness
level in citizens
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citizens'
citizen's
life
will play Fix the agreement mistake
lives
more
and more important role in Add an article
a more
countries
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countries'
country's
effectiveness
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