Economic progress is not the only way to measure the success of a country. What other factors do you think there are in measuring the success of a country? Which do you think is the most important factor?

Some people think that financial prosperity is not the only factor which shows
achievements
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of the
country
. I agree that
money
is not the only way
for
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to
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success
determination, and I try to show some more factors which can be used in
valuation
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the valuation
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of
success
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the success
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of
country
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the country
a country
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and try to highlight
most
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the most
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important
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. On the one hand,
money
is the universal way to measure
success
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the success
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of countries, especially in terms of capitalistic paradigm society development. It seems clear that one
country
which makes more
many
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money
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than another one,
in particular
GDP per capita, is more effective. It comes from
determination
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the determination
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of
effectiveness
which is
relation
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the relation
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of spent energy to achieved result. On top of that ability to fast adaptivity can be observed
likewise
the
success
element and must be measured by
money
.
For example
, countries which can predict future trends and develop proper technologies can earn more
money
.
Such
happened with Tesla company in
USA
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the USA
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which cough the idea to create electricity cars.
Due to
this
,
assets
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the assets
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of
this
company now are
most
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the most
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expensive in the world.
On the other hand
,
happiness
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the happiness
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of citizens must be taken
like
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as
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the most crucial mark of
effectiveness
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the effectiveness
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of
country
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the country
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being
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apply
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. Obviously, there is no point
to speak
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in speaking
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of
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the country
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country
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country's
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effectiveness
if inhabitants are unhappy.
Happiness
depends
from
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on
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the
government
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government's
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will and
closely
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is closely
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related
with
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to
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different paradigms
such
as capitalism, socialism, communism or even digital fascism which can
appeared
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in the
nearest
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near
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future.
Although
digital or pharmaceutical fascism can be more effective in terms of
money
it has nothing with
happiness
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the happiness
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of people.
However
,
happiness
is not
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a materialistic
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materialistic
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a materialistic
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category it
also
can be scaled and measured.
For example
, comparable research
of
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the level of
happiness
in socialistic China and capitalistic Japan shows that Chinese people
much
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are much
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more happy
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happier
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than
Japanese
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the Japanese
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and
number
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the number
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of suicides among
of
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apply
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Japanese
are
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much higher. In
conclusion
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I would like to highlight that
money
is not the only and not the major way of measuring of
country
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country's
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effectiveness
. My prediction is that other factors
such
as
happiness
level in
citizens
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citizens'
citizen's
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life
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lives
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will play
more
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a more
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and more important role in
countries
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countries'
country's
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effectiveness
.
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