The bar chart illustrates the patterns of male and female employment in three different countries: Canada, South Korea, and Sweden, between 2005 and 2015

The bar chart illustrates the patterns of male and female employment in three different countries: Canada, South Korea, and Sweden, between 2005 and 2015
The bar
chart
illustrates the patterns of male and female
employment
in three different countries:
Canada
, South
Korea
, and
Sweden
, between 2005 and 2015. In general, we can see that the percentage of working people increased, with the percentage of women showing the most significant rise. It’s crystal clear that in the first graph, male
employment
in
Canada
was almost 60%, and it was the lowest
employment
rate in the 2005
males
chart
.
However
, in
Sweden
and South
Korea
, they were approximately between 70 and 80
percent
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for
males
. The data shows us the females'
chart
always had a fluctuation in 2005. Take a closer look at the second
chart
; there was a fluctuation in both
males
and females. In
Canada
and
Sweden
, females were almost 50%, but in South
Korea
, there were almost 30%.
In addition
to
this
,
Canada
and
Sweden
were almost the same
as
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males
,
although
South
Korea
had the highest
employment
rates in 2015. Taking everything into account, the major difference between the three countries is that each country had different percentages in 2005 and 2015.
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