The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. 

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The diagram illustrates the data for 5 to
14 year-olds
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14-year-olds
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in Australia
took
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who took
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part in their leisure pursuits.
Overall
,
boys
are more active in these hobbies than
girls
. It is immediately clear from the chart that watching TV or videos
are
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is
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the most popular activity every one involved in their spare time.
However
,
three
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in three
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in four
these
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of these
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pastime
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pastimes
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the
boys
enjoyed much more than
girls
. The next most
poplular
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popular
hobby after spending time on TV is computer games. Almost 80 per cent
boys
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of boys
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in Australia played electronic games
while
around 60 per cent
girls
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of girls
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did. It is similar different in riding
bike
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bikes
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for
boys
and
girls
. There are 7 in 10
boys
participated in bike riding compared with 6 in 10
girls
. The only activity
girls
enjoyed more than
boys
is
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was
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art
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arts
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and
craft
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crafts
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. Just over half of
girls
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the girls
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made things skillfully and beautifully and a bit higher a third
boys
did. The chart
is seeming
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seems
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to demonstrate that
boys
take part in outdoor activities more than
girls
in Australian society.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls with synonyms.
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