The graph below shows levels of online shopping by age group for different times of the day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The diagram displays statistics about shopping on the Internet of five age groups at different times of day in 2015.
In general, the proportion of all groups increased to
shop
around 9 Wrong verb form
shopping
am
. After Correct your spelling
a.m
that
they kept going to rise strongly from 2 Add a comma
,that
pm
and peak
at 6 Wrong verb form
peaking
pm
– before 8 pm
. Then
the number of online shoppers dropped dramatically from 10 pm
to midnight. However
, the over 60
Correct your spelling
60-year-old
years
old group
reached the highest rate in the morning at 9 pm
– before 12 pm
.
Firstly
, the group
25 – 34 years
is the largest group
that did online shopping with approximately 34% of sales at 6 pm
– before 8 pm
. Then
the rate slightly decreased and sharply dipped from 8 pm
to midnight.
Secondly
, the rest 3 groups 16 – 24 years
, 35 – 44 years
and 45 – 59 years
also
rose slowly from 12 pm
and started to peak 31
% of Change preposition
at 31
35
– 44 Correct article usage
the 35
years
group
before 8 pm
.
Finally
, the people over 60 years
old fluctuated between 9 am to 4 pm
. They peak around 20% before 12 Correct your spelling
p.m
pm
and start to decline from 2 pm
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