The graph below shows levels of online shopping by age group for different times of the day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

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The diagram displays statistics about shopping on the Internet of five age groups at different times of day in 2015. In general, the proportion of all groups increased to

shop

Wrong verb form

shopping

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around 9

Correct your spelling

a.m

. After

that

Add a comma

,that

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they kept going to rise strongly from 2

and

peak

Wrong verb form

peaking

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at 6

– before 8

Then

the number of online shoppers dropped dramatically from 10

to midnight.

However

, the over

Correct your spelling

60-year-old

years

old

group

reached the highest rate in the morning at 9

– before 12

Firstly

, the

group

25 – 34

years

is the largest

group

that did online shopping with approximately 34% of sales at 6

– before 8

Then

the rate slightly decreased and sharply dipped from 8

to midnight.

Secondly

, the rest 3 groups 16 – 24

years

, 35 – 44

years

and 45 – 59

years

also

rose slowly from 12

and started to peak

Change preposition

at 31

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% of

Correct article usage

the 35

show examples

– 44

years

group

before 8

Finally

, the people over 60

years

old fluctuated between 9 am to 4

Correct your spelling

p.m

. They peak around 20% before 12

and start to decline from 2

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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