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The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.

The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
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The chart signifies the proportion of UK citizens (
men
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,
women
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 and
children
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) eating the advised quantity of fruits and vegetables in three different years. The information is given in percentages. At a glance, the consumers who were
women
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 had led the top in all three periods
while
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children
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 had the least amount of consumption in each
year
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. In 2002,
women
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 in the UK got the highest proportion of healthy foods and vegetables at about 25%
while
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men
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 and
children
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 did not reach that gorgeous number 22% for
men
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's consumption and 11% for
children
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,
in addition
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 in the next
year
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 2006, There was a minor significance In all groups of the population.
Children
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's contrary to the
men
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 and
women
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 percentage was the lowest figure approximately 16%
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 guys and females witnessed significant differences in
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 age, 32% for
women
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 and 5 per cent less for
women
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. In the
last
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 given
year
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 which was 2006, all of those groups had to see a little decrease compared to the previous
year
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. 27% which was the highest one recorded in that
year
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 belonging to the
women
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 and
men
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 chose to eat fruits and vegetables per day was 3% less than
women
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 whilst
children
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 showed almost 10% low difference to rest of them.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the sixth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, children, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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