The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.

The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the

recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
The chart signifies the proportion of UK citizens (
men
,
women
and
children
) eating the advised quantity of fruits and vegetables in three different years. The information is given in percentages. At a glance, the consumers who were
women
had led the top in all three periods
while
children
had the least amount of consumption in each
year
. In 2002,
women
in the UK got the highest proportion of healthy foods and vegetables at about 25%
while
men
and
children
did not reach that gorgeous number 22% for
men
's consumption and 11% for
children
,
in addition
in the next
year
2006, There was a minor significance In all groups of the population.
Children
's contrary to the
men
and
women
percentage was the lowest figure approximately 16%
whereas
guys and females witnessed significant differences in
this
age, 32% for
women
and 5 per cent less for
women
. In the
last
given
year
which was 2006, all of those groups had to see a little decrease compared to the previous
year
. 27% which was the highest one recorded in that
year
belonging to the
women
and
men
chose to eat fruits and vegetables per day was 3% less than
women
whilst
children
showed almost 10% low difference to rest of them.
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