The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
The chart signifies the proportion of UK citizens
(
men
, women
and children
) eating the advised quantity of fruits and vegetables in three different years. The information is given in percentages.
At a glance, the consumers who were women
had led the top in all three periods while
children
had the least amount of consumption in each year
.
In 2002, women
in the UK got the highest proportion of healthy foods and vegetables at about 25% while
men
and children
did not reach that gorgeous number 22% for men
's consumption and 11% for children
, in addition
in the next year
2006, There was a minor significance
In all groups of the population. Children
's contrary to the men
and women
percentage was the lowest figure approximately 16% whereas
guys and females witnessed significant differences in this
age, 32% for women
and 5 per cent less for women
.
In the last
given year
which was 2006, all of those groups had to see a little decrease compared to the previous year
. 27% which
was the highest one recorded in that year
belonging to the women
and men
chose to eat fruits and vegetables per day was 3% less than women
whilst children
showed almost 10% low difference to rest of them.Submitted by mawka974 on
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