Some people believe that social media has had a negative impact on society, while others argue that it has brought about positive changes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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modern world,
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are engaged in watching social programs on a
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a long period of time. It is considered by some that apps, which are international,
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negatively on the population.
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other
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suggest that
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kinds of apps can come with numerous advantages.
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they
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affect on
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human beings
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like
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harmful
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and becoming passive, they have benefits
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knowing the latest news, learning languages, and they may even assist with finding jobs. I argue that social
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may have more disadvantages. There are several reasons why I would argue against utilizing international apps
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with negative impacts.
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, what if
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connected
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to
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their phone
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phone
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tightly, they do not act more
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This
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can lead to obesity.
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, a friend of mine was
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kind of person, now he is obese, and his eye was
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negatively by the
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. Because of less acting. To overcome connecting to
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phone
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tightly,
people
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should use social
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on smartphones limitedly. I believe that
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would best solution to mitigate
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problem
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, using social
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also
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involves merits.
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as
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they are essential for learning. What I mean by
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is that there
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a good deal of information and
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news
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related to studying. By learning that information,
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will be even more knowledgeable than before. As an example, I am learning
English
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language by using
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international programs. It is an effective and
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fun
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way to learn a foreign language.
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people
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should be familiar with restrictions. In conclusion, not only
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social
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many negative impacts, but
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it
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also
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involve
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a number of benefits. Disadvantages are being obese and eye with glasses.
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the advantage is learning effectively like language.
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