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Some people think that it is a good idea to sociallise with work collegues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it is important to keep working life completely seperate from social life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Since our job takes up the majority of our day
time
, our
colleagues
 are an important part of our social lives. We see them every day and we usually have to interact with them many times, but people have a variety of responsibilities and different personalities in their lives and choose to spend their free
time
 in different ways. On the one hand, for those who are new parents' children especially when they are in first life, parents may prefer to spend their free
time
 with their children, playing and communicating, because it is their biggest responsibility in their life.
On the other hand
, there are many people who live alone and have outgoing personalities so, they like to spend their free
time
 with friends.
As a result
, it is a good idea to have a close relationship with their coworkers. It can
also
 create a friendly atmosphere when they are at
work
.
Moreover
, it can
also
 lead to many problems.
For example
, some cannot strike a balance between professionalism and friendliness and don't know how to behaviour should be different until they are at home or at
work
. Unfortunately, a lot of people don’t have
this
 ability and they abuse the morals of their friends at
work
. take advantage of their
colleagues
 with whom they have friendship with.
However
, I think it's better to practice moderation in all aspects of life and limit relationships outside of
work
 with
colleagues
, maybe getting
together with
colleagues
 once a month is a better idea than spending all your free
time
 with them.
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