¬Some people feel that the legal age at which people can marry should be at least 21. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Part of
human
believe that the legal Fix the agreement mistake
humans
age
for marriage
is 21. I totally disagree with this
statement. In my point of view, human
at Fix the agreement mistake
humans
this
age
lack at
Change preposition
apply
comitment
and low Correct your spelling
commitment
financial
.
In Replace the word
finances
early
20s people still studying and building Correct article usage
the early
their self
, if they Correct pronoun usage
themself
themselves
married
at Wrong verb form
marry
this
age
they will not be committed to marriage
. Commitment is the most important part in
Change preposition
of
marriage
and it takes a lot of energy and time from the person. For instance
, I got married at age
22 I couldn’t finish the
college because of the Correct article usage
apply
distraction
that Fix the agreement mistake
distractions
happen
at that time. After that, I tried to get back to college at Wrong verb form
happened
age
23 but suddenly I deliver
Wrong verb form
delivered
baby
which was very difficult to focus on studying and taking care of my child. My Correct article usage
a baby
life
was disaster
until I Add an article
a disaster
get
Wrong verb form
got
divorce
and Wrong verb form
divorced
finally
I went back to build my career Add a comma
,finally
life
. Therefore
, I believe that marriage
commitment need
someone who is settled in their career and Change the verb form
needs
life
.
Human
at Fix the agreement mistake
Humans
age
21 are still financially low, Due to
lack
of experience and low job Correct article usage
a lack
opportunity
. Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
Therefore
, it will be very hard to have a successful marriage
with low money. For example
, my cousin married at age
21, she was holding diploma
degree. She tried to search for a good salary job Correct article usage
a diploma
put
unfortunately she didn’t Correct your spelling
but
find
. Correct pronoun usage
onefind
Then
she was struggling to be dependent on her husband. Also
, her kids didn’t had
enough leisure time because they Change the verb form
have
are
all dependent Wrong verb form
were
in
their Change preposition
on
father
income.
Change noun form
father's
To conclude
, I Strongly disagree with the people who want to legalize age
21 marriage
. I do believe that young adult should Add a missing verb
be setteld
setteld
with their career future. To have a successful Correct your spelling
settled
marriage
Replace the word
married
life
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