¬Some people feel that the legal age at which people can marry should be at least 21. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Part of
human
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humans
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believe that the legal
age
for
marriage
is 21. I totally disagree with
this
statement. In my point of view,
human
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humans
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at
this
age
lack
at
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comitment
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commitment
and low
financial
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finances
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. In
early
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20s people still studying and building
their self
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themself
themselves
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, if they
married
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marry
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at
this
age
they will not be committed to
marriage
. Commitment is the most important part
in
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marriage
and it takes a lot of energy and time from the person.
For instance
, I got married at
age
22 I couldn’t finish
the
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college because of the
distraction
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distractions
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that
happen
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happened
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at that time. After that, I tried to get back to college at
age
23 but suddenly I
deliver
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baby
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a baby
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which was very difficult to focus on studying and taking care of my child. My
life
was
disaster
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a disaster
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until I
get
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got
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divorce
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divorced
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and
finally
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,finally
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I went back to build my career
life
.
Therefore
, I believe that
marriage
commitment
need
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someone who is settled in their career and
life
.
Human
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Humans
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at
age
21 are still financially low,
Due to
lack
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a lack
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of experience and low job
opportunity
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opportunities
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.
Therefore
, it will be very hard to have a successful
marriage
with low money.
For example
, my cousin married at
age
21, she was holding
diploma
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degree. She tried to search for a good salary job
put
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but
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unfortunately she didn’t
find
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onefind
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.
Then
she was struggling to be dependent on her husband.
Also
, her kids didn’t
had
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have
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enough leisure time because they
are
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were
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all dependent
in
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on
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their
father
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father's
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income.
To conclude
, I Strongly disagree with the people who want to legalize
age
21
marriage
. I do believe that young adult should
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be setteld
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setteld
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settled
with their career future. To have a successful
marriage
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married
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life
.
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