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The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The graphs show the performance of Australian dollars compared with Japan, China, and
United
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the United
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 States on a yearly basis from 2004 until 2009.
Overall
, it is
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 that
Australia
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Australia's
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export
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exports
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 in China
is
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apply
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consistenly
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consistently
increasing
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increased
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 from 2004 to 2009,
overpassing
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surpassing
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 its
import
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imports
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 in 2008.
In contrast
, the
export
 trend in
United
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the United
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 States is relatively stagnant and consistently
fall
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falls
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 below its import.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
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the Australia
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Australia
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Australian
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export
 trend with Japan is a bit more interesting. It started with the same amount of
export
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exports
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 and
import
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imports
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at
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in
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 2004, but the
export
 value
tend
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tended
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 to increase until it reached its peak
at
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in
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 2008 before going down.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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