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The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words.

The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The charts highlight the
value
 of
Austalian
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Australian
export
 and
import
value
 with Japan,
China
 and
United
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the United
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 States. The
value
 is presented in Australian dollars and
focus
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focuses
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 on 2004 to 2009.
Overall
, each of the
chart
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charts
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 has different
trend
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trends
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 of
export
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exports
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 and
import
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imports
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. In
China
, Australian
export
value
tend
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tends
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 to
consitently
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consistently
 increase from around 12
billion
 A$
at
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in
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 2004 to around 32
billion
 A$
at
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in
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 2009.
While
 the
export
value
 was lower compared to its
import
value
at
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in
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 2004, it managed to bypass the
import
value
 at around 2008.
This
trend
 in Japan is pretty different compared to in
United
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the United
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 States.
Since
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From
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 2004 until 2009, the
export
value
 in
United
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the United
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State
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States
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is
Wrong verb form
was
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consitently
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consistently
 around 10
billion
 A$ lower than its
import
value
 and the
overall
trend
 is relatively stable.
This
trend
 is different
with
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in
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China
.
At
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In
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 2004, the
export
 and
import
value
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values
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is
Wrong verb form
were
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 the same for
China
.
While
 the
import
value
trend
 is relatively stable, the
export
value
 tend to increase and reach its peak
on
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in
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 2008 at around 42
billion
 A$, the highest amount compared to all three countries, before going down back to 30
billion
 A$
on
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in
show examples
 2009.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, export, import, china, trend, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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