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The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The charts highlight the
value
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 of
Austalian
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Australian
export
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 and
import
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value
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 with Japan,
China
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 and
United
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the United
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 States. The
value
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 is presented in Australian dollars and
focus
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focuses
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 on 2004 to 2009.
Overall
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, each of the
chart
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 has different
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trend
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trends
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 of
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export
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exports
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 and
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import
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imports
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. In
China
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, Australian
export
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value
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tend
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 to
consitently
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consistently
 increase from around 12
billion
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 A$
at
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in
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 2004 to around 32
billion
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 A$
at
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in
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 2009.
While
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 the
export
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value
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 was lower compared to its
import
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value
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at
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in
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 2004, it managed to bypass the
import
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value
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 at around 2008.
This
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trend
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 in Japan is pretty different compared to in
United
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the United
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 States.
Since
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From
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 2004 until 2009, the
export
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value
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 in
United
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the United
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State
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States
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is
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was
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consitently
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consistently
 around 10
billion
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 A$ lower than its
import
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value
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 and the
overall
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trend
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 is relatively stable.
This
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trend
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 is different
with
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in
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China
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.
At
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In
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 2004, the
export
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 and
import
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value
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values
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is
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were
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 the same for
China
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.
While
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 the
import
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value
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trend
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 is relatively stable, the
export
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value
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 tend to increase and reach its peak
on
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in
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 2008 at around 42
billion
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 A$, the highest amount compared to all three countries, before going down back to 30
billion
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 A$
on
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in
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 2009.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, export, import, china, trend, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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