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some people think that government westing money in art what extent to agree or disgree?

#people #government #money #art #disgree
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I am strongly showing my interest in the BSc (Hons)
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 (Top-Up)
course
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 at the University of Hertfordshire because I think
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course
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 will not only boost my career but
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 increase my existing skills to reach Earth on the moon. The motivation of my learning abilities inspired me to study
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 and it will enhance my knowledge. My abilities in critical thinking, good grasping power, time management, ability to learn different things and many more motivate me to take an interest in
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, there are various reasons behind
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 for choosing
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 I think
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science
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 is the study of computation, information and automation which is very useful for me.
Computer
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science
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 includes artificial intelligence,
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 systems & and networks, security, database systems, numerical analysis, programming language and software engineering which is the key factor to study
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 for me. During my academic in
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 engineering studied different subjects
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 as applied
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, office automation, programming in C & C++, Java programming, PHP & my SQL, Operating Systems,
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 networking and many more unique subjects showing my passion in
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. I have been participating in the management system in my school competition.
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 has developed my ability to do work on time which will ensure that I actively participate in future programs. There are some of my key abilities problem solving, critical thinking, creativity, organization, management, leadership, teamwork and more. I think taking
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 for me is a big achievement in my life. I am looking for
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 university's for better career opportunities.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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