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More and more people in the city live in homes with small spaces or no outdoor areas. Do you think it is negative or positive development?

#people #city #homes #spaces #areas #development
Lots of individuals these days reside in small space home or dwells with no outdoor area. In my
opinion
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this
 is
an
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a
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 negative development. living in
small
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a small
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 space leads to
congestiona
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congestion
congestions
 and invite health problems like breathing
disorder
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disorders
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, irritability and so
onas
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on as
 there is no air or ventilation . life
also
 become tedious if humans
lives
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live
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 in
these area
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this area
these areas
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. First and foremost, urban
area
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areas
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 are expanding day by day. but dwelling sizes are shrinking .
Moreover
, facilities like
balcony
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balconies
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,
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and patio
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patio
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patios
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 are not provided in
majority
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the majority
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 of construction. most people are forced to live in
small size
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small-size
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 flats with no
amenties
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amenities
.
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, in
india
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India
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, Mumbai has
average
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an average
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 dwelling size of 650 square feet with no ventilation. living in
such
 dreadful
condition
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conditions
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 leads to severe health problems like breathing
issue
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issues
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, irritability and so on.
Furthermore
, Most dwellers have to compromise on
happiness
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the happiness
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 of living .
There
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 lives became mundane . They can not enjoy bright sunlight,
air
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or air
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 in their homes. They have to compromise with living conditions.To cite an example,In
US
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the US
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 ,
Newyork
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New York
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 has
limited
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a limited
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 supply of ventilated flats . Most
newyorker
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new Yorkers
 are forced to inhabit
in
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apply
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small flats. In conclusion ,
Although
 city life offers better
oppurnities
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opportunities
,still most urbanites are forced to live in unlivable conditions. In my
opinion
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 it is
an
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a
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 negative
devlopment
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development
.
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