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With the rise of e-books come the decline in paper books. Some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some claim it is good to move forward towards technology by a rise in E-book editions
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on the other hand
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, it is argued that causes a decline in paperback. One major advantage of using
e-books
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 is that we can save our environment and it can impact a reduction in
paper
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 costs. Even though there are some drawbacks as
such
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 we can not use these
e-books
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 without smart gadgets and it might impact eyesight vision at an early stage. On the one hand, Electronic books enable us to read anything from anywhere around the world with the help of our smart devices.
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 rise in technology may help to save trees that are used for
paper
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 production, which eventually contributes to protecting the environment.
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,We can reduce the cost of manufacturing
paper
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 and reduce wastage which results from them.
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, 70% of a company’s total waste comes from printing mistakes, junk mail, billings, and packaging of
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. Unfortunately, only 25% of the above can be recycled.
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, Some traditional book lovers would always connect to the way of reading the books only with paperback editions. They feel that the imagination of the story can experienced only with the touch and feel of
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.Unequivocally, usage of
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 can not be utilized by everyone ,
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, elderly people or younger children will face difficulties in using
E-books
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 technology constraints for the former and the latter might get early eye-sight problems
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 of excessive usage of screen time.
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,
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 we can protect our environment and access information easily through these e-book editions. Paperback books are the traditional ones which give us a realistic experience of the context of what someone read.

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