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Unemployment is one of the biggest problems of contemporary society. What do you think are the main causes of unemployment? What solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Unemployment
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 is becoming more widespread in many parts of the world.
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 essay will examine the causes
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 the consequences of
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 tendency. There are a variety of different causes for
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 matter.
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 with, the main cause of employment is population increase, in some countries, the population is increasing, leading to an increasing
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 of job applicants,and the job competition rate
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 increases, so the
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 of unemployed
people
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 is increasing.
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, India is currently the most populous country in the world and
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also
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 has a large
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number of
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unemployment
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 rate. Another contributing factor to mention is the impact of the recent COVID-19 pandemic,
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 social distancing, many production and business activities have to be temporary, leading to a high
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 rate. Explanations, COVID-19 has put heavy pressure on the Vietnamese economy in all aspects and the opportunity for workers to find jobs has become more difficult than ever. Unexpectedly, there are some significant effects to be taken into consideration. The first and most important are poor production, underutilised resources,and reduced income. Details, when
people
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 are unemployed too much, when
people
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 are too unemployed, there will be no one to produce, spend and exploit valuable resources and the economy will fall into a situation of slow development. Another effect no less important is that more social evils will appear, especially
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people
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. Examples,
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people
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, they don't work and they don't have money so they start stealing, relying on the efforts of those who have jobs. In conclusion,
unemployment
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 is a big problem that affects a lot of
people
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 nowadays. It’s mainly caused by the spirit of hard work and diligence of each person. From what has been discussed, we need to reduce the
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 of unemployed
people
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, which is advice for a more developed and modern civilization.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological displacement
  • Automation
  • Economic restructuring
  • Outsourcing
  • Global competitiveness
  • Skills gap
  • Workforce downsizing
  • Labor market
  • Job creation strategies
  • Retraining programs
  • Economic stimulus
  • Entrepreneurial initiatives
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