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modern technology is changing our world This has advantages such as bringing people together through communication it also has disadvantages such as destroying differences between cultures To what extent agree or disagree ===========================================

#technology #world #people #communication #differences #cultures
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It is generally accepted that our world nowadays has been changed by the development of modern
technology
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modern
technology
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 has both pros and cons effects. Some
people
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 believe that it can bring
people
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 together via communication,
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says
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 it may destroy the variety between cultures.
This
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 essay will discuss
these
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advatages
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advantages
 and
disavantages
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disadvantages
 of modern
technology
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 at some points. First of all, modern
technology
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 can connect users worldwide
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 the invention of
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internet
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. In the past, there was
limited
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a limited
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 technique to connect
people
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 from different countries together as they
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 to travel for long
distance
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distances
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 to see each other or
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 paper
letter
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oversea
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. Thank to modern
technology
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,
people
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 can use computer and
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the internet
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internet
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 to communicate with
other
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each other
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 from
any where
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 without travelling.
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, students who are studying in Australia are able to connect with their family at home or
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 more relationships with other international students via social media.
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 that way, they are not
felling
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 alone
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 studying
oversea
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as well as
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be
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 able to communicate with other friends.
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,
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, modern
technology
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 may break the variety between cultures. Without modern
technology
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,
people
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 used to communicate with each other via their
traddional
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traditional
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, before the
appreance
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appearance
 of
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the internet
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internet
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, when a Japanese wants to
sent
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 a letter with a
hand craft
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scarfe
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. It
proofs
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to
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 other friends,
however
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, using
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internet
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the internet
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • revolutionize communication
  • global relationships
  • cultural exchange
  • cultural homogenization
  • diminish traditions
  • uniform global culture
  • cultural elements
  • dilute traditions
  • dominant languages
  • marginalizing
  • communication tools
  • cultural preservation
  • intercultural connectivity
  • cultural identity
  • cultural diversity
  • positive and negative outcomes
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