The table below compares actual and predicted figures for populations in three different cites.

The table below compares actual and predicted figures for populations in three different cites.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The table below compares actual and predicted figures for populations in three different cites.
The table gives information about the actual and predicted
for
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population
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in Sao Paulo, Jakarta and Shanghai in 1990 and 2000. As we can see from the information given,
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Sao Paulo had the highest amount in both.
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Jakarta was the lowest. Shanghai
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fluctuated in the period given.
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,
Sao
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Paulo, the actual
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in 1990 was 15%, and the predicted
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in 2000
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increased to 25% before
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to 18% in 2000.
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, Shanghai
,
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was fluctuated between 12.5% and 17%. Started at 13.5% 1n 1990
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the
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predicted
was high in 2000 at 17%,
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fall
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to 12.5% in
actual
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the actual
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population
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in 2000.
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, Jakarta, was the lowest between the two countries given, beginning at 9.5% in actual
population
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in 1990
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then
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and then
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the expected rise in 2000 to 14%, but the actual in 2000 was 11.5%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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