These days, people tend to change many jobs during their lifetime. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?
Changing
jobs
has become more and more common nowadays. Use synonyms
Although
it will have some short-term drawbacks Linking Words
such
as losing a stable Linking Words
income
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however
I totally agree that Add the comma(s)
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this
phenomenon brings more benefits than costs as It brings benefits Linking Words
such
as getting new Linking Words
skills
and higher pay in the long run.
It is true that when we change Use synonyms
jobs
we might be at risk of losing the stable Use synonyms
income
that we are earning. Use synonyms
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this
loss of stable Linking Words
income
will only Use synonyms
last
for the short term. Linking Words
For example
, people as a driver might lose stable Linking Words
income
in the short-run , but if one's not changing their career . They may face the challenge of auto-pilot and turns out to lose their job in the long run.
There are several advantages and one of them is people can learn more Use synonyms
skills
by changing Use synonyms
jobs
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For example
, kitchen hands who work for a Chinese restaurant know how to make Chinese food only but if one changes to working for a Korean restaurant , they will learn about how to make Korean food and as Linking Words
such
they will have more Linking Words
skills
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Furthermore
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skills
, employees can usually get higher salaries which is better for people in the long run.
In conclusion , Use synonyms
although
changing Linking Words
jobs
might bring short-term sacrifices Use synonyms
such
as losing a stable Linking Words
income
. With the benefits discussed Use synonyms
such
as learning more Linking Words
skills
and earning higher wages in the long run . Use synonyms
It is clear that
the trend of changing many Linking Words
jobs
during our lifetime brings more advantages than disadvantages.Use synonyms
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
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Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
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- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...