The breakthroughs in medical science are by far the most significant advances in world society over the last two centuries. Discuss this statement and give your opinion.

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One
of the widely discussed issues nowadays is medical
science
which is considered
one
of the most significant in our world.Now
people
are beginning to realize what
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medicine
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humanity. Personally, I tend to think
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statement.
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, it is well known that medicine is
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part
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life.
One
of the main
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behind
that is
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we tend to have problems with health,
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unfortunately
it is
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inevitable
and
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of
this
science
possesses advantages for us.A good case in point is recent
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epidemic
.Covid-19 actually became a huge problem for humanity,which took thousands of
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daily.
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,
people
were forced to stay at home
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time and it was unbearable for most of
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. How
this
problem has been solved?We informed about answer highly well.It was created vaccine by breakthrough in medical
science
.It is by far that
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in world society over the
last
centuries,
however
,turning to the other side of the argument,there are certain
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of improving medical
science
and
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attributes to any other ones.
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victims
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reaching results.
One
clear instance is testing cosmetics products on animals.
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perceived
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as
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horrible action
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it has unpredictable consequences.In my opinion,it is disgusting that
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such
a kind of action owing to development.I consider that it must be punished even if it is for correct aims. Having weighed everything mentioned up, we can come to
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that the
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breakthroughs
in
this
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definitely
the most considerable in world society,
nevertheless
,in some cases
people
are able to act badly towards alive organisms in seeking to indicators.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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