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The flow chart shows 'trampling', the negative effect of tourists walking in the countryside for the environment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The flow chart shows 'trampling', the negative effect of tourists walking in the countryside for the environment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The flowchart demonstrates how the ‘trampling’ can harm the environment in the countryside.
To begin
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 with, when tourists walk in the area, the grass is flattened.
This
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 led to impacts:
first,
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vegetation was damaged, and
second,
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the soil became hard because of foot pressure. These made the reduction in air and water quality in the soil
as well as
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 damaging the flora.
As a result
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, plants become weaker and plants are not able to reproduce and grow like usual. Those things obviously will reduce the greenery.
This
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 reduction is
also
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 caused by increased erosion or water runs off the land.
Finally
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, all of those cause erosion and worsen the quality of soil and greenery.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduction" was used 2 times.
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