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In many places new homes are needed, but only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes here. what is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
The lack of sufficient places for building new
homes
 in
cities
 is a factor to tendance move to suburbs town to do it , that some people disagree,because of protecting of the
countryside
 and avoidance of any buildings.To my mind, it depends on our attitude about the causes related to the publication and protecting nature. At the first step , on the one hand , we should investigate the causes of the request for building new
homes
. In fact ,the population has increased in the bigger
cities
 ,because of finding new occupations and they want to be their place of work .But ,the
cities
 cannot support them in housing ,especially in the city centre, so the government have to develop the city in its
countryside
.Because there are not enough places to build new
homes
. Despite
this
, if the government do not want to respond the demand for people to have new home leads to increasing homelessness. In my opinion , regardless of the horrible consequences of the lack of enough attention from the government , irreparable problems.
On the other hand
,
firstly
, we should not ignore the outcomes of deforestation in the
countryside
 that the habitat of animals will be degraded very soon. It is that the
countryside
 is a suitable habitat for many animals ,so
according to
 some people `s beliefs,we should protect them.
Secondly
 , having a live
countryside
 can help us to reduce air pollution , because of growing a variety of trees around
cities
 .
Finally
, if we have gorgeous suburbs around our city,certainly ,we can utilize them in our free time at the weekend. In conclusion, the growth in the population of
cities
 is not the main factor
that is
 spoiling the
countryside
 if there is an engineering plan for management between the increasing population and their demand for
homes
.
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Develop a clear position regarding the importance of protecting the countryside versus building new homes.
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