The flow chart shows 'trampling', the negative effect of tourists walking in the countryside for the environment.

The flow chart shows 'trampling', the negative effect of tourists walking in the countryside for the environment.
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The flow chart demonstrates how the activity of the tourists walking in the grass can harm the environment in the countryside (trampling). The flow chart explains the destructive effects of the stepped plants.
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reports 3 stages before the
vegetation
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reaches the impact.
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, there are 2 major detrimental effects which are broken
vegetation
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and compacted soil.
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with, when tourists walk in the area, the grass is flattened. The first impact is, obviously, the plants are damaged because of the foot pressure, and the second impact is the land is compacted and hardened.
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the fact that hardened ground prevents the air and water from entering inside the
vegetation
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has led to a lower ability to reproduce and get nutrients to grow.
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is
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caused by the damaged plants, which can lose their strength and become weaker to reach the sunlight and stand still. After that, the reduction of air and water access to be absorbed in the ground increases the erosion risk.
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, it makes the
vegetation
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reproduction lower.
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, since it is already broken, it keeps the soil eroded
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influences herb infertility.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words vegetation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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