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3.The line graph compares how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a refrigerator in 1990 and 2000.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

3.The line graph compares how much time it would take for three companies to manufacture a refrigerator in 1990 and 2000.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line chart below displays the
hours
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 that three companies need to produce refrigerators between the years 1990 and 2000.
Overall
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, the
time
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 that companies A and C needed to create coolers dropped steadily over the entire
time
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period
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, and
company
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 B remained relatively stable.
Company
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 A at the start of the
period
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 required 30
hours
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 to make a refrigerator, and
then
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 it gradually reached around 22
hours
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 of fabrication per refrigerator, becoming the organization that needed the least
time
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.
Company
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 C demanded the most
time
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 to make a cooler in 1990, with 35
hours
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, during the 10 years the corporation decreased moderately the
time
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 to fabricate the product, finalising the
period
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 requiring approximately 28
hours
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 maintaining its longest
time
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 to produce.
Company
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 B began the recorded
period
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 with around 27
hours
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 required, ranking the
first,
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with the less
time
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 needed to create a cooler, during the
period
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 between 1999 and 2000 it remained relatively stable, with a small fall, finalising the
period
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 with the necessity of just over 25
hours
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 for the creation, becoming the second least
time
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 required.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, time, period, company with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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