the diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugarcane. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided process diagram illustrates different steps of producing

sugar

from

sugar

cane.

Overall

, it can be seen that there are seven stages in

this

linear process. Commencing with cultivating

sugar

cane for 12-18 months in the field and ending with drying and cooling the

sugar

in the mill.

To begin

with, in the first

stage

, 12-18 months

old

Correct word choice

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grown

sugar

canes

Fix the agreement mistake

cane

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are

Correct subject-verb agreement

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ready to collect from the

sugar

cane field and

then

get harvested in the next

stage

by tractor or by

hands

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hand

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After

this

stage

, collected

sugar

canes

crushed

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are crushed

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in the machine to get the juice out, followed by purifying the juice using

limestone

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a limestone

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filter. During the next

stage

, heat is

being

Unnecessary verb

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used to turn the juice into syrup by evaporating it and after that centrifuge

stage

where

Rephrase

apply

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the

sugar

crystals get separated from the syrup. At the

last

stage

, by drying and cooling the

sugar

, it is ready to pack and sell.

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the diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugarcane. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodworking should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family. To that extent do you agree or disagree?

Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities What problems does this causes? What can be done about this?

Human activities have a negative effect on plant and animal species. Some people say that it is too late to do anything. Some people think that we should take effective action to improve the situation. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?

The advantages of the spread of English as a global language will continue to outweigh its disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?