the diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugarcane. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided process diagram illustrates different steps of producing

sugar

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from

sugar

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cane.

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, it can be seen that there are seven stages in

this

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linear process. Commencing with cultivating

sugar

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cane for 12-18 months in the field and ending with drying and cooling the

sugar

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in the mill.

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with, in the first

stage

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, 12-18 months

old

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apply

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grown

sugar

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canes

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cane

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are

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ready to collect from the

sugar

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cane field and

then

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get harvested in the next

stage

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by tractor or by

hands

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hand

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After

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this

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stage

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, collected

sugar

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canes

crushed

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are crushed

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in the machine to get the juice out, followed by purifying the juice using

limestone

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a limestone

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filter. During the next

stage

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, heat is

being

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used to turn the juice into syrup by evaporating it and after that centrifuge

stage

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where

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apply

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the

sugar

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crystals get separated from the syrup. At the

last

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stage

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, by drying and cooling the

sugar

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, it is ready to pack and sell.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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