The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the manufacture of carbonated drinks.
Overall
, the
process
consists of five stages, beginning with the
water
cleaning and ending with the packaging at the supermarket. First of all,
water
is collected from the factory for cleaning. In the
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industry the raw
water
starts to filter and inside the
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machine some processes happen like
water
softener and chemicals.
After
this
,
process
it has pumped. After finishing
this
process
, commenced heating evaporation and carbonation
process
, the
water
goes into electric heaters and, when the heating case is finished, it is sent to the carbon dioxide machine via a colling pipe. In the next stage, the
water
is transported to a mixing tank where the
water
is carbonated. The tank has some functions
such
as colouring,syrup, and flavour. Next, filter development began. Before the
last
mechanism, the
water
was filled into two types thing bottles and cans and
then
put into boxes both of them.
Subsequently
, packaged boxes are transported to track for sale in supermarkets
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, water with synonyms.
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