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Many people nowadays believe that studying foreign languages brings us many advantages. How far you agree with this opinion?

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There is no denying the fact that individuals think that learning another
language
 will give them a
lot
 of
benefits
.
While
 it is a commonly held belief that there are a
lot
 of advantages to learning a foreign
language
, there is
also
 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that studying other
languages
 will give individuals a
lot
 of
benefits
.
To begin
 with, nowadays English is considered a universal
language
 so it is necessary to learn it,
In other words
, travelling will help you in many situations if you do not know the local
languages
,
In addition
, it
also
 will help to make friends which will give you a
lot
 of
benefits
.
For example
, they will help to know the beautiful places that only the locals know about. Another point to consider is that learning another
language
 will help your memory to get stronger.
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also
 possible to say that it is good exercise for your brain especially if you have Alzheimer's,
Moreover
, it is a good thing to learn a
lot
 about a new culture,
For instance
, if you travel to countries you have not visited it before it will help to explore the culture better because they will fill like you one of there own. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that studying other
languages
 is a significant thing, and all parents should realize that teaching children at a young age the two main
languages
 which are English and Chinese
languages
 plus their own will give them a
lot
 of
benefits
 in there future.
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