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the pie chart below show the number of native speakers of diffrent languages in canada in 1996,2006, and 2016.

the pie chart below show the number of native speakers of diffrent languages in canada in 1996,2006, and 2016.
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The two pie charts display the percentage of native speakers in
canada
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Canada
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 in 1996,2006 and in 2016. the largest proportion of people use
English
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 as their native
language
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 and the rest were French and Non-official
languages
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.the comparison during the
years
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 was almost the same. During 1996, 60
percentage
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 of people's native
language
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 was
English
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 and it was the dominating
language
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 in all three
years
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. 23
percentage
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 of people use
french
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French
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 as their native
language
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 and the rest of the
candian
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Canadian
Candian
 population uses other non-official
languages
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. even after ten
years
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, more than half of the Canadian population uses
English
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.The French-speaking community was around 21
percent
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 which declined slightly by 1
percent
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 and 20
percent
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 were non-official
languages
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.
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 2016,
English
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 dominance
on
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in
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Canadian
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the Canadian
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 population was still there and French and non-official
languages
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 were the rest .the three pie charts clearly
states
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the
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that
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English
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 dominance
that
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apply
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declined slightly by 1
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percent
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 every 10
years
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 and there is a growth in other
languages
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 simultaneously.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words english, language, languages, years, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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