You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and - ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. - --- Ask what the prices are and - how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

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Dear Sir, I am writing to inquire about some electrical goods that I would like to purchase from your store as soon as possible. I wonder if you could deliver a washing machine and microwave on order to my address 475 Bramalea Road, Brampton L6T 2X2. Please let me know if have these appliances in the store so I can order them earlier. I am

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interested in knowing the prices of these two and at what range they fall between. I have checked your website but was not able to find the exact details of the pricing. I would appreciate it if you could hold these items for two days as I am outside of my home attending a family function. I look forward to receiving your response. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Parjit Kaur

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While the letter follows a clear structure, make sure to ask all required questions in a manner directly linked to the goods mentioned. Be specific about models or types of the electrical goods you wish to inquire about.

coherence cohesion

The overall structure of the letter flows well, but consider using a wider range of cohesive devices and paragraphing to link ideas more explicitly.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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8 paragraphs

138 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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