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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The below map depicts the three locations that can be built
a
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leisure
center
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centre
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.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the suggested locations are
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the residencial
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residencial
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residential
area
 to the
center
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centre
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 of the map,
industrial
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the industrial
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area
 to the right
side
 and
left
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the left
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side
 to the forest.
To begin
 with,the first suggestion is to be the industrial zone which is near to the river and
also
having
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has
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 good road
access
.
However
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 the
emmissions
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emissions
 from the factories can be a problem that
need
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needs
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 to be
considared
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considered
.
Secondly
,
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the residencial
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residencial
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residential
area
also
having
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has
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 road
access
 from both
side
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sides
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.
Additioanally
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Additionally
 the
near by
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nearby
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 river will give
access
 to
the
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apply
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water activities as well.
Thirdly
,the location that situated left
side
 of the map and
right
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the right
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side
covered
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is covered
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 by a forest .
However
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 having considerable distance from
thefactory
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the factory
side
 will supply
better
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a better
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 environment for people without air pollution.Compared to
other
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the other
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 two locations,
third
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the third
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 one
locates
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is located
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 away from the river and residential
area
 without sufficient road
access
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, side, access with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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  • situated
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  • town centre
  • highly accessible
  • residents
  • ample space
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