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Band 5

everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity. do you agree ar disagree

At present, all individuals should attend on voluntary
work
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 from their proportion of wealthy. I completely
agree
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onagree
toagree
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this
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 topic because
that
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circumstance yields numerous
advantageous
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advantages
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 in our
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life
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lives
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 and
i
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I
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 will explain why in
this
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 essay. On the one coin of
this
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 side, arguably, there could be reasons why
charity
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 is crucially important for
purpose
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the purpose
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 of
people
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 in
life
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.
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, if inhabitants afford
to
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apply
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charity
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 from their income, they
able
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are able
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 to obtain
the
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apply
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superb useful
thing
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things
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such
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 as
an
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assistance for their
life
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,
abundance
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and abundance
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 for not only
life
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 but
also
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 their
work
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as well
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apply
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. A second positive factor is
whole
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the whole
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 question of finance. By
which
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this
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 I mean that even individuals participate
eclectic
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in eclectic
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 types of
charity
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work
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as a result
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 poor
people
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 may ameliorate their
life
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,
for instance
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,
charity
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put
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puts
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 aside income for
like
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apply
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orphan youngsters or senior citizens. Notwithstanding a lack of
inhabitant’s
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inhabitants’
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salary
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salaries
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, they allocate money to good aspects in order to government
may developed
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develop
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 without poor
people
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. To exemplify in the USA, there are
not
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no
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 insidious aspects
as
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of
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charity
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. Alternatively, owing to relying on savings,
this
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 result in
help to
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helping
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 elderly
people
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,
meanings
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meaning
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 magnanimous
people
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 one day
they
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apply
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will be senior citizens and
income
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their income
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 will be returned
by
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to
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charity
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. Foremost other challenges appear to be issues of
this
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 kind of
work
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.
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, most
people
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 live with
extend
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extended
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family
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families
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therefore
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 they can not support consistently
charity
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, if they spend money on it, they will not supply food or rent
of
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to
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country
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the country
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 charge. In a nutshell,
own
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apply
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my feelings is that
charity
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 is the most prime of our
life
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,
in addition
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together with
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government
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the government
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 and
people
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 should create
program
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programs
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 like
charity
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due to
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 it, we can preserve
world
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the world
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 from negative sphere.

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