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Fast food is a part of life in many places. Some people think this has bad effects on lifestyle and diets. Do you agree or disagree?

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In our modern
life
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 individuals believe that convenience
food
 is a part of life in many governments and I believe that the outweigh
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than drawbacks. Excessive dependence
of
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 fast
food
 is increasingly making us lazy. Nowadays, people know that they can eat ready
food
 whenever they want, regardless they are
in
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 a day out or at home.
This
 mindset keeps them away from preparing
food
 themselves which involves some culinary engagements and physical activities. In fact, running up to
food
 preparation is attached
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 preparing related ingredients and making all the necessary stuff ready. When we do
this
, our cramp-prone muscles and the
overall
 body get exposed to the automatic exercises.
And more
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 interestingly, as culinary activities are part of our daily life,
this
 physical exercise continues almost daily, and it goes in a well-disciplined manner. Once we switch to fast foods, all these incredible benefits go away, and we are pushed into a perennially sedentary lifestyle.
In addition
, fast
food
 is one of the least healthy options for people to eat. The ingredients in
this
food
 usually contain empty calories and do not provide adequate nutrition
such
 as minerals and vitamins, which are essential to support everyday metabolism.
That is
 why,
this
food
 breeds deadly
diseases
 in
human
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 body. In fact, the essences that are used in fast
food
 production and in texture, are mostly well-proven carcinogenic elements resulting in
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developing
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fatal
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diseases
 like cancers in the long run. To be specific, people who are more dependent on these junk items for their diet usually succumb to type 2 diabetes, cardiovascular
diseases
, obesity and so on.
To conclude
, apart from creating a sedentary lifestyle, relying on fast
food
 has a long-term negative effect because
this
 type of
food
 is usually produced in a way that breeds carcinogenic
diseases
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity
  • Heart disease
  • Diabetes
  • Sodium
  • Nutritional habits
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Addictive eating patterns
  • Socioeconomic disparities
  • Convenience
  • Affordable
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