The line graph shows the number of people moving from rural to urban areas from 2000 to 2025.

The line graph shows the number of people moving from rural to urban areas from 2000 to 2025.
The line chart provides the number of
people
who migrated from
countryside
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the countryside
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to
cities
from 3 different countries namely Iran, Indonesia and Russia from 2000 to 2025. It
is clearly see
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that
,
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Indonesia has gradually
increse
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increase
increased
whereas
Iran and Russia
shows
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show
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fluctuation throughout.
To begin
with, In the year
of
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2000 around 10 million
people
moved to urban areas and
shows
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showed
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moderate
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a moderate
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rise which
is
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was
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30
milions
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million
in the year 2025. In between 2000 to 2025
people
who migrate has slightly increase.
On the contrary
, In 2000 there were almost 15
milions
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million
populace
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people
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moved to metropolitan
cities
and it
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is
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was speedily climb
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was speedily climbing
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. Till
the
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2010,
Number
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the Number
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of
people
was almost 45
millions
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million
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. Even after
the
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2010 majority of
people
moved from rural areas
whcich
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which
was almost 70
milions
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million
in 2015. By the end
od
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of
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the
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2025, around 85
milion
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million
people
migrated from
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the country
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country side
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countryside
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to
cities
in Russia.
On the other hand
, Iranian
people
was
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were
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the majority in all
the
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three countries who moved to
cities
from rural areas. The total number of
people
who shifted to
metrocities
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metro cities
atrocities
was even below
to
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10
milions
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million
in 2000
while
it
reaced
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reached
10
milions
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million
millions
in 2005 which was upsurged around 50
milions
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million
in 10 years.
People
who moved to
cities
in Iran were at
peak
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their peak
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by
the
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2025 which is just below
to
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100
milions
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millions
million
.
To conclude
,
Majority
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the Majority
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of
people
who
is
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are
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Russian and Iranian moved from
countryside
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the countryside
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whereas
Indonesia shows
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a graduall
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graduall
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gradually
gradual
increase from 2000 to 2025.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cities, milions with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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