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The line graph shows the number of people moving from rural to urban areas from 2000 to 2025.

The line graph shows the number of people moving from rural to urban areas from 2000 to 2025.
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The line chart provides the number of
people
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 who migrated from
countryside
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the countryside
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 to
cities
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 from 3 different countries namely Iran, Indonesia and Russia from 2000 to 2025. It
is clearly see
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is clearly seen
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 that
,
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apply
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 Indonesia has gradually
increse
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increase
increased
whereas
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 Iran and Russia
shows
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show
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 fluctuation throughout.
To begin
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 with, In the year
of
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2000 around 10 million
people
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 moved to urban areas and
shows
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showed
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moderate
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a moderate
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 rise which
is
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was
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 30
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milions
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million
 in the year 2025. In between 2000 to 2025
people
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 who migrate has slightly increase.
On the contrary
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, In 2000 there were almost 15
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milions
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million
populace
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people
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 moved to metropolitan
cities
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 and it
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is
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was speedily climb
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was speedily climbing
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. Till
the
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apply
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2010,
Number
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the Number
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 of
people
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 was almost 45
millions
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million
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. Even after
the
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apply
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2010 majority of
people
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 moved from rural areas
whcich
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which
 was almost 70
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milions
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million
 in 2015. By the end
od
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of
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the
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apply
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2025, around 85
milion
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million
people
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 migrated from
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the country
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country side
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countryside
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 to
cities
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 in Russia.
On the other hand
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, Iranian
people
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was
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were
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 the majority in all
the
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apply
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three countries who moved to
cities
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 from rural areas. The total number of
people
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 who shifted to
metrocities
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metro cities
atrocities
 was even below
to
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apply
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10
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milions
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million
 in 2000
while
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 it
reaced
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reached
 10
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milions
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million
millions
 in 2005 which was upsurged around 50
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milions
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million
 in 10 years.
People
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 who moved to
cities
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 in Iran were at
peak
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their peak
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 by
the
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apply
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2025 which is just below
to
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apply
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100
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milions
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millions
million
.
To conclude
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,
Majority
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the Majority
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 of
people
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 who
is
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are
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 Russian and Iranian moved from
countryside
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the countryside
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whereas
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 Indonesia shows
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a graduall
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graduall
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gradually
gradual
 increase from 2000 to 2025.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cities, milions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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