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The line graph shows the number of people moving from rural to urban areas from 2000 to 2025.

The line graph shows the number of people moving from rural to urban areas from 2000 to 2025.
#line #people #areas
The line chart provides the number of
people
 who migrated from
countryside
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the countryside
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 to
cities
 from 3 different countries namely Iran, Indonesia and Russia from 2000 to 2025. It
is clearly see
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is clearly seen
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 that
,
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apply
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 Indonesia has gradually
increse
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increase
increased
whereas
 Iran and Russia
shows
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show
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 fluctuation throughout.
To begin
 with, In the year
of
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2000 around 10 million
people
 moved to urban areas and
shows
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showed
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moderate
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a moderate
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 rise which
is
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was
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 30
milions
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million
 in the year 2025. In between 2000 to 2025
people
 who migrate has slightly increase.
On the contrary
, In 2000 there were almost 15
milions
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million
populace
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people
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 moved to metropolitan
cities
 and it
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is
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was speedily climb
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was speedily climbing
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. Till
the
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2010,
Number
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the Number
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 of
people
 was almost 45
millions
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million
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. Even after
the
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apply
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2010 majority of
people
 moved from rural areas
whcich
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which
 was almost 70
milions
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million
 in 2015. By the end
od
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of
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the
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apply
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2025, around 85
milion
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million
people
 migrated from
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the country
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country side
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countryside
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 to
cities
 in Russia.
On the other hand
, Iranian
people
was
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were
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 the majority in all
the
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apply
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three countries who moved to
cities
 from rural areas. The total number of
people
 who shifted to
metrocities
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metro cities
atrocities
 was even below
to
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10
milions
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million
 in 2000
while
 it
reaced
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reached
 10
milions
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million
millions
 in 2005 which was upsurged around 50
milions
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million
 in 10 years.
People
 who moved to
cities
 in Iran were at
peak
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their peak
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 by
the
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apply
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2025 which is just below
to
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100
milions
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millions
million
.
To conclude
,
Majority
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the Majority
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 of
people
 who
is
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are
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 Russian and Iranian moved from
countryside
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the countryside
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whereas
 Indonesia shows
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a graduall
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graduall
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gradually
gradual
 increase from 2000 to 2025.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cities, milions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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