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In the future, it seems more difficult to live on Earth. Some people think more money should be spent on researching another planet to live, such as Mars. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the coming decades, it is believed that humans
would
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 face survival problems on
planet
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 Earth. It is thought by some that financial
resources
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 should,
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, be utilized to check for the presence of life on other planets, like Mars. In my opinion, I strongly agree that we should investigate if life can be supported by multiple planets to address the growing issues of the
population
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,
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 and man-made disasters. First and foremost, owing to the ever-increasing
population
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, there are not enough
resources
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 available for each and every individual.
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discrimination, wherein countries and people have started fighting against each other for valuable
resources
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 like
fossil-fuels
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fossil fuels
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, or to assert claims on foreign lands for the same.
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, in the past, developed countries like the United States of America
,
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 encroached on Iraq for taking control
on
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 the petroleum reserves, in the name of fighting terrorism. Another key reason, leading to
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 a development is the need to have a secondary habitat in the event of an apocalypse. It is believed by many,
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, that humanity will be decimated in the long run just like that of Dinosorous if natural disasters like
asteriods
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asteroids
 or meteors strike on
mother
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planet
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simulatenously
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simultaneously
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, it is believed that man-made
diasters
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 like global warming and flash flooding can’t be avoided if staying on just one
planet
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.
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, finding a
planet
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 which can support the survival of mankind, can help ease the burden of natural
resourcs
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resources
resource
 requirements to cater to
ever-increasing
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an ever-increasing
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population
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. In conclusion, money should be utilized resourcefully to identify
for
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the existence of life on other planets to cater to the increasing difficulty of
rising
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the rising
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 global
population
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, and their natural
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resources
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while
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 at the same time
mitigate
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 the increasing disasters happening on the
planet
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