Some people feel that the private lives of celebrities should not be openly shared by the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is currently a contentious argument over whether the mass media should deliver information regarding the private lives of famous people. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
this
notion and my opinion will be discussed in the following paragraphs with a suitable conclusion. I firmly believe that sharing the personal information of other people without permission is considered a low level of journalism on the one hand and a law violation
on the other hand
.
In other words
, spreading these details that are not intended for public attention is harmful
for
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an individual as for society.
For instance
, in certain circumstances uncovered private details would lead to scandals and loss of reputation.
Moreover
, these kinds of news, definitely, affect other members of celebrities' families, including kids and wives resulting in trauma and family tragedy.
Secondly
, there is a sort of information
that is
considered detrimental to society as people are distracted from significant topics. To cite an example, some media owned by corrupted and bribed politicians will throw some sensitive content in order to direct society's attention and anger toward the third party.
Moreover
, in the next weeks, all news and programmes will spend most of their prime time discussing the colour of the pants of some rock singer rather than a governmental crisis. Another point to consider is aggravation of the morality and human values.
Consequently
, societies are drawn into useless conversations rather than bringing vital issues to the surface. In conclusion, the sensitive content of celebrities shall not be mainstreamed by the media. I believe that the aforementioned points are strongly supporting my viewpoint.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Invasion of privacy
  • Media scrutiny
  • Public persona
  • Personal autonomy
  • Sensationalism
  • Paparazzi
  • Tabloid journalism
  • Right to privacy
  • Mental well-being
  • Public interest
  • Ethical journalism
  • Celebrity culture
  • Gossip columns
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