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Describe Something that You Did with Someone/ a Group of People

#someone #group #people
Doing something with a
group
 of people can be a lot of fun. Whether it is a project, a task or an activity, working together can meet awarding experience. It can
also
 be a great way to build relationships learn new skills and positively impact the people around you here today. I would like to talk about a
time
 when my college teacher gave us a presentation to make and we had to present it online and it was about the philosophy of life. She provided us with a list of students from which we could choose five more students and divide our work, but the problem was that we had no access to the library resources
as well as
 the
group
 discussion room, because at that
time
 everything was closed
due to
 the Corona pandemic, and the presentation was like a hard nut to crack. And we just had a limited
time
 just two weeks. To solve
this
 problem I contacted my teacher and asked for a suggestion she said for online study the IT team of the college made one platform where we can discuss with other
group
 members and share the media
as well as
 important files and documents. Luckily, we finished the presentation on
time
, and my teacher praised us for the hard work that we devoted to it. The reason why we did it together was that it was compulsory to participate in a
group
.
Also
, working in a
group
 helped us to learn about new things from each other so
this
 was a
time
 when I did something with a
group
 of people.
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Writing
Try to link your ideas and sentences more smoothly to enhance coherence and cohesion. Some transitions could've been handled better.
Content
Ensure to develop your ideas completely. While you mention the philosophy of life as the topic of the presentation, you don't delve into it nor how it influenced your team's discussion and learning.
Grammar
Always check your grammar. There were some grammatical errors that could've been avoided with careful editing.

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