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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The table depicts the tourists who travelled internationally in four different years(1990,1995,2000 and 2005) in countries
such
 as Africa,America,Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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,
Europe
 and the
Middle
east
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East
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.
Overall
, the number of
people
 who
travelled
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travel
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 abroad keeps on increasing but the most
prefered
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preferred
 country was
Europe
whereas
people
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the people
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visited
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who visited
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Middle
Correct article usage
the Middle
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east
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East
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was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 the lowest. It is evident that the major countries that
was
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were
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 in demand
was
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were
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Europe
,America, Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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.
People
visitng
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visiting
 America was 80.5
million
 in 1990 and it
increases
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increased
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 for 10 years but in 2005 the
visitors
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number of visitors
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 decreased and reached
to
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apply
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113.2
million
whilist
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whilst
while
 Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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visitors
 showed a constant increase from 60.2
million
 to 135.8
million
 from 1990 to 2005.
However
, the
visitors
Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
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 who visited
Europe
 was 280.2
million
 in 1990 but after five years it reached almost double. In Countries
such
 as Africa and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East, the
people
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number of people
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 slowly increased.In 1990, Africa and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East
were having
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had
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 18.2 and 9.8
million
visitors
whereas
 in 2005 the
visitors
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number of visitors
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 increased to 28.7 and 15.8
million
. The
people
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number of people
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qho
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who
 visited
Europe
remian
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remain
 to have constant from 2000 to 2005.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words europe, middle, people, million, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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